screenplay exercise II

[ickle_jim]

yeah i agree, mainly becos i dont have a camcorder of my own yet [img]frown.gif[/img]

[miker]

tsk, okay. sounds fair. especially since i have a headstart with rushes ...

guess i should come up with a fresh idea since i won't have to commit to filming it ;-)

but i still think critiques BEFORE it's fully scripted could be more valuable. no professional writer would finish a screenplay without a commission -- guess it's about emotional investment. if you write a script for love you'll naturally take criticism more badly than if it's just knocks about the pitch/theme/premise etc..

but each to his own, let's see how we get on.

[spaceham]

Yeah, I like the sixty second idea. Sounds good to me. BTW, I think what Ralph's trying to say is that he craves attention because his parents never loved him.

[miker]

then i propose three phases of production:

1. throw your 60s concept onto the board BEFORE you write it so we can all criticise your idea. your idea might evolve and be better for this.

2. you write a page of script you are happy with. personally i find it easier to criticise ideas and concepts and step-outlines than scripts (thus my preference for 1. above)

3. you shoot/edit your film as necessary.

then we can all compress our films ready for 60secondmoviehour submission and see if any of us is successful with them. if not, i have ftp space i can offer for exposure members to upload their films to, which will naturally allow the rest of us to d/l and watch them and provide critique ;-)

so now we need to set ourselves a time limit for this project.

anyone who signs up to the deliverable (the compressed movie) and fails to deliver can consider their attitude to making films a major obstacle to their filmmaking career ;-)

i'm happy to help where i can, but squeaky wheels get most oil

despin, spaceham, eddie:
are you all up to committing to a deliverable?
we obviously need to discuss a practical timescale for making sh*t happen.

any other takers to do this?

[deanl]

Hey there.

Count me in.

One problem. The idea I have... I dont think its going to have any dialog. So I think I'm going to post the storeyboards as apose to the scripted page. Im not sure maybe that will change.

Also I dont think anyone should have to "commit" to ending up with a compressed movie. Maybe they have no intrest in filmming it, but still want to write the script. Maybe they dont have the equiptment.

I say we stick with the scriptwriting and if anyone wants to make it (I think I will) they can do so.

Despin out.

[emjen]

'idea'

First shot of a boy lieing knocked out in the bushes. Very unusual place.

Earlier: a crossroad. Nothing is on it. Suddenly from all 4 ways comes traffic, the boy, the car, someone on a bike and someone else. They all meet with eachother in a weird and ridiculous way and make the boy end where he lies in the first shot.

[eddie]

the only way I can do this is to use some footage I already have, I dont have the time to reshoot anything at the momen, so Ill need to re-edit some footage I already have.

So my concept is this:

The Return of the King:

Colourful Man with a crown and in straight jacket escapes from drab guards.
Gets out of straight jacket and flies away to followers in the sky, his crown falls off as he does so.
Guards look up and see him having a better time than they are.
They fight over the crown. One puts the crown on his head but instead of flying away, he gets piled into the ground.

As I say I havent got time to film anything else, so if this gets slated then cut me out of the big old plan!

Cheers!

[miker]

eddie, i'm recycling footage too ;-)

[Phaethon]

Count me in, gentlemen.